(Continued from Part 3)
Noushin scrubbed her wet clothes on the flat river stone, glancing occasionally at Sholeh and Sharuz, their wet, plump bodies glistening in the sun. Noushin wasn't worried about the twins, the water was shallow, the sun was warm, and there was no one about to complain about their nakedness. She was a bit concerned, however, about Niki, the goat, who did not seem pleased at being dressed in Sholeh's best clothes. "Tuck it up higher," she called to them. "She might trip."
At sixteen, Noushin had little patience for overbearing busybodies, and her widowed status brought some measure of independence as a compensation for the poverty.
Although she could not say that she had come to love Akbar in the few weeks of their married life, her grief when he was killed in the massive air strikes of '05 was sincere. He died without knowing the secret she herself scarcely knew or comprehended. The twins were born a month to the day before her fourteenth birthday, and Noushin was not sure if the backbreaking, assiduous struggle to care for them, and keep them alive and healthy, was motivated by true maternal love or the simple desire to have playmates again.
According to the customs in her remote village, technically in Iran, some said, though so close to the Afghan border that the topic was a frequent subject of the kind of lively debate occasioned by a question of local interest whose answer makes absolutely no difference to local life, she should have stayed with Akbar's family and raised her children with the help and interference of dozens of in-laws, but Akbar was the only son, his mother had died when he was born, and his sisters had spread out across the globe, married with families of their own.
She could have gone with her father-in-law to live with his youngest daughter in Turkmenistan, but the ravages of war, and the question of whether an aged blind man would count as a valid chaperone for several days' journey in the company of the sisters' husband and the half-dozen Turkmen brothers and cousins he had brought with him rendered the invitation lukewarm, and her politely regretful decline of it less of a scandal than her acceptance would have been.
So she stayed in her little mud-walled enclosure, barely more than a cave, and managed to provide enough basic care, and avoid enough social opprobrium, to at last have her longed-for playmates, though she had little time to play with them, she made a face at the pile of clothes still unwashed. She wanted to dress up the goat, too.







Article comments
1 - Temple Stark
Assuming this your writing, good writing. Of course it's got its political side but smart people should be able to appreciate good writing and either except or reject the message.
- temple
2 - SFC SKI
As political commentary, it's not so hot, but as speculative fiction, it is catchy.
Needs proofreading though, Corps not Core of Engineers. A few run-on sentences but other wise enjoyable to read.
3 - Dave Nalle
It's not terribly well written. The prose is dense and tiring to read and the concept is so contrived, unrealistic and relentlessly propagandistic that it does more to alienate the reader than suck them in to the worldview. Subtlety would work better for this sort of fiction than ham-handed polemic. Even worse than Ayn Rand.
Dave
4 - Temple Stark
And still better then anything else in the politics column. Gawrsh.
5 - Dave Nalle
OMG this crap is in the Politics column? Don't we have a column for distopian flagellatory fantasy?
Dave
6 - Temple Stark
Nope - just your Web site. Sorry, you serve a straight line like that and you get served back LOL.
7 - DuctapeFatwa
Yes, it is my writing, thanks for your kind words.
And thanks to Dave for your thoughtful comments. "worse than Ayn Rand" is a singular distinction, but it could be interpreted as damning by faint praise.
I hope you will all read the previous 3 parts, available on this site, or you can always wait until CNN catches up. Keeping ahead of the current news is quite a challenge :)