http://blogcritics.org/ A sinister cabal of superior bloggers on music, books, film, popular culture, politics, and technology - updated continuously. en Copyright 2005 by the authors Tue, 1 Feb 2005 16:36:37 EST http://backend.userland.com/rss Blogcritics.org custom software http://blogcritics.org/archives/2005/02/01/153455.php#comment-113852 ain't that the way it always is, tho - when i am gone... etc. back to interview here...am in the middle of interviewing musician for site here. should be pretty grand, i pray. 113852@blogcritics.org Tue, 1 Feb 2005 16:36:37 EST http://blogcritics.org/archives/2005/02/01/153455.php#comment-113850 thanks shark (((back))) at you. no, not as bad it sounds. perhaps i take poetic license too much. the line breaks should be abrupt here and awkward, a bit like spitting or coughing.... good that you caught that. this should be hard to read out loud, and that is part of the point; hard to swallow. love love and all best to you. s. 113850@blogcritics.org Tue, 1 Feb 2005 16:35:37 EST http://blogcritics.org/archives/2005/02/01/153455.php#comment-113848 my favorite line: ...when I am gone, I will be what you want... 113848@blogcritics.org Tue, 1 Feb 2005 16:35:02 EST http://blogcritics.org/archives/2005/02/01/153455.php#comment-113847 Sadi, nice piece. Heartbreaking. I hope your despair is not as deep as it sounds. Here's a digital hug, babe. ~[[ ]]~ PS: one question - I've never understood why poets put line breaks where they DON'T contribute to the beat and breaths of the piece. Or should I assume you intended that? best, Shark 113847@blogcritics.org Tue, 1 Feb 2005 16:33:14 EST http://blogcritics.org/archives/2005/02/01/153455.php#comment-113839 Wow - two poems, one after the other - talk about synchronicity - and I think I seem to see some thematic resemblance. 113839@blogcritics.org Tue, 1 Feb 2005 16:21:18 EST